Topic: Poems

TRAPED!!

I’ve got a candle
And I’ve got a spoon
I’m stuck in a place with no doors
And no room
Shadows of fear
Darkness all around
Nothingness is so scary
It makes no sound
I am scared to take the next breath
Because it may be the last
Wondering what has happened to me
My sweat is running fast
Could this be a nightmare?
Or just a f**ked up dream
Has everyone abandoned me?
My memory is wiped clean
Fighting for my life
Air is getting tight
Does anyone know I’m gone?
I’m stuck in shock out of fright
Knowing death is on its way
I’ve got one question to ask
Or should I just say
I’m never going to last

"The jedi are nothing more than the sith, they fear to love because love is a weakness, and jedi strive on strength"
-RonLogsdon (Darth Nihilus)

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preety good

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For a sith.... lol  :angry:

Do not fear death. Death is all around us. If we show fear it jumps at us faster than lighting, but, if we do not show fear, it casts it's eye upon us gently and guides us slowly into infinity.

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It is good period. For Sith or Jedi or Shadow.

"Semper Paratus"
"Attero Totus Sanctus"
"Silently this one moves amongst the helpless and the oppressed."
"Nosferatu - Carpe Noctem"
"Fraternitas furvus occido"
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I actually believe that would of been loads better if you didnt rhyme so much. The rhyme at the end fitted, but the rest seemed to break up the rhythem

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When there is peace, prepare for war.

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With free verse, it matters not how, when or where it rhymes, if it all.

"Semper Paratus"
"Attero Totus Sanctus"
"Silently this one moves amongst the helpless and the oppressed."
"Nosferatu - Carpe Noctem"
"Fraternitas furvus occido"
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You've gotta have some rhythem in it though. Well thats what I think. I know you can have poems with no rhythem or rhyming scheme, but you might as well write a story.

There will always be Sith, as long as the Jedi remain.
When there is peace, prepare for war.

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the poem is good, but I don't get how you can make a poem without writing

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Unless you make a poem in your head and then remember it. But you must have too much time your hands to do that.

There will always be Sith, as long as the Jedi remain.
When there is peace, prepare for war.

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decent

Endless confusion...

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Thanx u guys.
anyone have any poems they wanna put up?

"The jedi are nothing more than the sith, they fear to love because love is a weakness, and jedi strive on strength"
-RonLogsdon (Darth Nihilus)

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The poem was good,
I didn't get it at first,
and then I understood.

I loath how it lacks with cheer,
it makes me feel down and... meer?

Seriously though, I loath poems that are all "FEEL BAD!!!"... that make me feel bad when reading them. Here's a poem to cheer everyone up!

Roses are red,
Violets are lavender,
I am cool,
and you are (not)ender

"Fraternitas Furvus Occido"
Resurrect, and you shall find... peace.

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Cute. Real cute.  <_<

"Semper Paratus"
"Attero Totus Sanctus"
"Silently this one moves amongst the helpless and the oppressed."
"Nosferatu - Carpe Noctem"
"Fraternitas furvus occido"

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My boy taught me that one Brian... Ben&#33;

"Fraternitas Furvus Occido"
Resurrect, and you shall find... peace.

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Well that would explain a lot.  big_smile

"Semper Paratus"
"Attero Totus Sanctus"
"Silently this one moves amongst the helpless and the oppressed."
"Nosferatu - Carpe Noctem"
"Fraternitas furvus occido"
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Heres a good one.

I&#39;m good at sports
I&#39;m good at school.
I&#39;m good at dancing.
I&#39;m good at being ironic.
I&#39;m good at being sarcastic.
I&#39;m good at being nice.
But I&#39;m not good at poetry.
Can&#39;t you tell?

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When there is peace, prepare for war.
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That is the best one I have ever heard&#33; tongue  lol

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You gotta love the repitition. It builds up to a dramatic finale.

Well kinda lol

There will always be Sith, as long as the Jedi remain.
When there is peace, prepare for war.

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As I sit in this world
Waiting to go
I dream of Hell
And my anger grows
As angels play
And Demons plan
I will one day die
And join the ranks
As we march on heaven
And make heaven Hell
The one true place
Is the place to go.

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I&#39;m not a poet really. I&#39;m a musician. I take poems and set them to music B)

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